Very well directed! The camera work was amazing. Great job!
Very nicely animated! I enjoyed it.
The arms on blue hair could use some overlap from the forearm. It looks like the hand is attached to the bicep. Other than that, it was okay.
Okay so this is an okay series. I like it and it's watchable but there are things that could be done to improve it.
The voice acting could use a bit of work. Keiichi's delivery and timing on some lines need work. For example, "You don't know what a dvd or a dvd player are...". The way the actor said it, sounds like he's asking a question but it's meant to be a statement. Also Dea is supposed to be the stiff one but the voice acting doesn't differ from either character. It's stuck in that tone of nonchalant when Keiichi (though from what I've seen of this series is nonchalant, accepting everything that Dea with no real range of emotion) could have a bit more potential. If there's more of a contrast between Dea and Keiichi in manner and in actions, the audience can then be able to relate to Keiichi more and make your story interesting instead of following this two dimensional character and his sidekick deathgirl.
The writing needs work. Conversation feels staged. When Dea asks why humans act the same to avoid persecution, Keiichi replies with a though out answer. If he stumbled on his words or thought about it or didn't answer at all, that would give him a bit of humanity. Something to get him off of that stoic nature.
THINGS THAT ARE WORKING
Dea's character is great. She has subtle hints of curiosity, the fact she pokes everything she sees at least gives her some form of interest. She's seeing the world for the first time so of course she's curious.
The animation is limited but it works for this series. The characters are pretty well drawn and I can definitely see the appeal of this concept. I look forward to seeing more.
This episode is the reason why I like Kirb so much. He actually is the most mysterious out of them, that's how I feel at least. He obviously just wants to have fun with his friends but there's a lot of stuff beneath the surface. You did a good job foreshadowing his persona, especially in Episodes 4-6.
I love that he puts up this faÃ§ade of being a jerk but he really values his friends and their opinions. I feel that a of people can relate to that and I look forward to more development in his character.
It's weird that in Flamegirl's character growth episode, I write a review on Kirb. I just find him really interesting. I guess it's because you can see everyone's true intention except his...well, until episode 6 really.
Really good stuff. Looking forward to more.
The characters look a little too similar. When I first watched it I thought the character might be like his alter ego or something like that. The writing and voice acting need a little more polishing. The some of the writing seems forced just to get exposition out, and for the acting, Keiichi seems to sound forceful with everything he says. Now that could work for his character, but at first, out of his element and should sound for lack of a better phrase.
Now with all that said, the concept is really interesting and has a lot of potential. The art fits the story telling. The best sequence you have in this is the scene where Dea shows Keiichi her power. Not bad, looking forward to seeing more.
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